DigiPak second draft and final

Above is my second draft digipak after the feedback I received I realized that it had no theme to it, some where colour, some where black and white, to fit in with Jaya's website I decided to go with the black and white theme, it is simplistic and allows the two products to fit well together. Another large criticism I received was that the images were too cramped and you couldn't see each one. to fix this I decided to have two images of Jaya, one on the front and one on the back. The rest of the pages are black filled with either artwork or simple text. This makes for easy reading and gives a clear theme. 

Below is my final draft, I added a few images to enforce the artists image while still sticking to the same black and white theme. 

DigiPak Feedback

Love the page with the 'J' on it, very professional, the front cover photo shot is excellent, the page with lots of photos looks a bit too all over the place, perhaps if you want it in that style find a way to present it in a much neater way.

The pictures are very professional and it is very believable that Jaya is a real singer.

I think that the images are of a good quality but I don’t like the "J" design it is very unclear and hard to see. The thank you page could also be changed a little because it’s not very good to look at.

Very pop girl like, needs a CD.

WWW: Very good Front cover and song list looks highly professional. EBI: Song list background picture was in b/w. Personally not a fan of the photos layered on top of each other personally I think picking 9 and fitting them all in so you can see would look better. Not sure what the J on one whole page is? Change the title text on the thank you page or at least remove the underline. Just keep with the b/w really looks good and professional I would recommend using the same font on all pages (apart from front cover) and keep continuity and it will be perfect good luck!

Jaya's photo shoot is brilliant and the top middle photo looks like something out of a proper album cover. However there is no colour uniformity.

When looking at the Jaya digipak it looks professional straight away, all the images that have been taken are in good quality. The font that have been used work really well with the rest of the layout and background colours that have been used. Not everything on the background is black and white and colour is used as well this is what makes it look professional. You can tell what the genre is when looking at the digipak.

Strong imagery and text here! The fact that the boxes don't quite match is really bugging me, and I'm not really getting the far right column, I don't think they're adding anything to the digipak.

Lovely, professional looking pictures, they look great! Like the font used, but could have maybe been repeated throughout as there are a few.

I think this is a well thought out digipak that looks nice and is very simple but effective. The fonts used are very good and easy to read. The digipak has synergy with the rest of the artist’s products which is very good.

I like this digipack because it uses multiple images of the star and shows clearly who it is. I also like the themes

Could add in a lyrics page rather than one of the pages with pictures.

Can see the pictures are taken in school I like some of the pictures

Not sure what the 'J' is for Photos look professional Photo montage in the bottom right looks like it was made quickly

AWESOME variety all round some typography could be a bit more exciting, particularly on the cover

The fonts don't seem to link together, which they could to make the digipak even better. I love the section which is just black and white stripes with the 'J'. There are 4 black and white sections and two coloured sections which i feel could all be the same to link together.

Collage image page is good - pictures all look really professional and appropriate. Improvements: not sure what the actual theme is here, it’s all a bit mish mash, try and make it more continuous with your ideas then it will look more effective.

The feedback is very mixed some people like the 'J' art some do not, most feedback was really helpful it showed me that the images look too messy and that the text is inconstant which makes the digipak look amateurish.  

DigiPak First Draft

This is the first draft of my digiPak, I am really pleased with how it turned out, the only thing that I may change is the art page and put the lyrics to 'US' on there just because I am not sure if the page goes with the rest of the digipak.

Draft #4

I have made more improvements in my music video, hopefully this is the last draft and the final will be up shortly.
 

Lyrical timeline

Below is a timeline of the song with certain words that should be used as a trigger for a cut, this should hopefully aid me in the editing process. 

Intremental       (02 seconds)   Dance?
 'Kiss'               (09 seconds)
'This'                (15 seconds)
'Borrow'           (19 Seconds)
'Aroplane'        (22 seconds)
'Ok'                 (30 seconds)
'See'                (32 seconds)
'Know'            (37 seconds)
'Keeps'            (51 seconds)   Dance?
'Sleep'            (56 seconds)
'Sleep'            (1:03 seconds) 
'Lanes'           (1:10 seconds)
'Excitement'  (1:13 seconds)  Dance?
'Remain'        (1:16 seconds)
'Plan B'          (1:22 seconds)
'Feel'              (1:27 seconds)
'Me'               (1:30 seconds)
'Heya'            (1:30-32 seconds)
'See'               (1:32 seconds)
'Know'           (1:38 seconds)
'Love'            (1:42 seconds)  Dance?
'Home'          (1:45 seconds)
'Keeps'          (1:52 seconds)
'Sleep'           (1:58 seconds)
'Sleep'          Chop till the end of the song     Dance?

Website-Overall

I think that my website has been improved massively, at the top of each page are icons which links to Jaya's Facebook,Twitter, Instagram and Youtube. The sites images are a lot clearer than before and each page fits within its limits. I think that there are still some small changes that can be made but these are minor compared to the changes made recently.

Website-Shop

Most of the comments I received where that this page needed completing which has now been done, I have added multiple products to the shop which allows for a wider audience. I think that this is a good idea because it shows that the artist is versatile because she has a wide variety of audience.

Website-Gallery

This page is very simple, it shows an array of images from various shoots with Jaya it allows the user to see different sides of Jaya. The feedback I received said that the most images were of good quality and variety, some disagreed by saying that they are pixelated and in the same costume. I agree in some respects that the images are pixelated,these images I have deleted but as the costumes go I feel that the images are appropriate but may add some more depending on timing.

Website-JAYA

This page gives the user a detailed overview of Jayas life before her music break, it gives information on her family and home life, I feel that this page is really important because it gives the website a more personal feel to it. A lot of the feedback I received complement the in-depth description of Jaya.

Website-Videos

The 'music' page has a link to the video page which allows the user to watch music videos, behind the scenes and interviews, although not complete yet, the videos will have a small description.

Website-Music

The page contains images of Jayas' EP with the title, release date (both UK and Worldwide) and name of the songs. Below that is an image of Jayas' single 'US' with the lyrics next to that image. I feel that this page is simple yet effective because it shows the music Jaya has produced without having too much to explain, the text is large which makes it easy to read/understand.

Website-News

On this page it contains 'News' from Jaya and about her work, it also contains dates for her UK tour and a link to ticket master, in the centre is a 'performance' image of Jaya, I feel that this ties the page together however, the comments I received said it still looks a bit 'wordy' and I think that I might remove some of the text to make it clearer to read and less bunched.

Website-Homepage

I kept the homepage really simple with the album cover and a link to iTunes to buy the album. I feel like this is sufficient as it show the artist and gives you an indication of her genre of music. Some of the feedback I received said that the home page was 'boring' but I feel that is sufficient to get the information across.The Home page before did contain 'News' however I got a lot of comments saying that it didn't fit the page properly so I removed that and moved it to another page.

DigiPak-Peers

I took a survey  to help my fellow classmates improve their digipaks. Below are my two favourite digipaks.

ALLEYWAYS

This is by far my favourite digipak, it's so professional and the theme continues throughout, the images and text are very clear which makes it easy to read. I like that each side has a clear image and text, making each side different but work collectively together. The only thing that could do with a slight edit is the CD, it goes slightly over the page but that can edited rather fast.In conclusion the DigiPak is slick all the images show the band, honestly it could it could be put in a record shop and you wouldn't notice the different. 


COSMO
Cosmo is my second favourite digipak. It really shows the artist and allows the audience to have an understanding of the music without having to listen to it. Again, the digipak links together all with a psychedelic background, the first image shows a heavily edited image of the artists, the rest of the sides show different images of either people or space, it shows the genre of the artist. 

First Draft feedback.

The feedback I received is very mixed, one underlying comment that came from the feedback was that the shots are too long and need more variety in the video. The editing appears to be very basic and so its very easy to see where the cuts have been made, some also say that the lip syncing is also out of sync. This makes me rethink the video, it shows that I still need to do a lot of work. One thing that received a lot of positive feedback was the quality of shots, some people also think that there should be more shots of Jaya laying on the floor. 

What went well:
Good editing at the beginning
Variety of distant shots 
Effects used 
Lying down shots 
Performance shots in drama studio
Silhouette Shots
Shot transitions
Mise en scene
Variety of shots 
Jaya plays part well 

Even better if:
Lip Syncing was in time
Shorter length of shots
Wall shots are too dark
Editing can do with improvement 
Black and white as well as colour doesn't show the theme.
Some shots do not fit the genre
Laying on the floor shot seems out of play 
Lighting is a bit of an issue in the drama studio
Add something else 
Performance gets boring 
Faster cuts

On average I scored 29.9 out of 40. In conclusion the things that went well are the quality of shots, the mise en scene and the variety of shots, the things that could be improved upon are the lengths of the shots, espcailly the wall shots and have either black and white or colour having both doesn't give a clear theme. By using this feedback I am going to try and get something else into the video for example we have a lot of good dancers in the school so I may incorporate someone to dance to the song and use these clips in my video to add something more than just performance. 

Second Draft.